Consuelo shifted slightly before spitting a single word at the back of Eli's head.
'Porco!'
He smiled before replying, 'sim Consuelo, e voce e una prostitute pequeno...'
Lizzie didn't understand a word, but the exchange seemed amicable enough given the translation that followed.
‘She called me a pig,’ said Eli, ‘ and I told her she was a whore, cos that's what she is... But she’s my whore and she knows I loves her, why else would she be in my berth?’
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Like I said things change, and if you write like me they change more often than I sometimes feel happy with.
I have an outline in my head, now I have to put some flesh on it's bones and that's proving a problem. Eli is one of the guards on the vessel 'Diana' and he's talking about his dark haired Portuguee lover Consuelo. They have a fiery relationship which will shortly be terminated when the young lady gets a knife in her gut... not from either of the two characters in this scene I might add, though it could well result in a relationship developing between the two later in the story.
Red Lizzie is a devious character, she can be a good friend but you really wouldn't want her as an enemy.
Chris.
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Good to find that you're moving forwards with your writing, Chris. Things do change but I find that's all part of the creative process. Keep on marching ... spring is on her way!
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I know its not fiction and, to be fair, its Suzy that found it, not me. Still, its relevant to the way your blog seems to be heading, right?
Thanks for the support Carole Anne. And I checked out that site Milord, as you say, it's an interesting take on the use of the blog to create interest in your work.
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